Walking The Line

peebrain SG

Thinking ahead, I bought myself a golden
ticket, an original idea, walked and
got in line like the rest, beholdened
to a subscription letter in my hand.
In front, the women, no -- ruddy giggly girls
dither in the queue for one of your kisses,
hardly aware that I've quietly reversed
back in line, a once-removed missus.
I don't mind (I lie) if you've had ten, twenty,
even a hundred (God forbid!) since then.
I've had my share, dismissed others easily
from a line not unlike this. Sweet chameleon,
so what if it ends where the sun doesn't shine?
Despite the odds, I wish I were last in your line.

DeadPoet SG

I read this poem several times but the last line I still dont get it. Wink

peebrain SG

The last line "Despite the odds, I wish I were last in your line" is the anchor of the piece.

The narrator once had a relationship with the person he/she is addressing, and although it didn't quite work out, she hopes for a chance to try again. But interim, other people have come and gone, and the object of her affections has no lack of suitors -- hence the idea of a "line".

So when the narrator says, "Despite the odds, I wish I were last in your line", she's hoping her love will eventually take her back, effectively "stopping" the line.

And she, as the last person in the queue, will end up with her love, happily ever after.

DeadPoet SG

Hmm. I am not if I should be happy for the narrator but that is a very interesting perspective. Wink

peebrain SG

lol it's a case of sheer desire eclipsing practicalities more than anything else.

and the narrator's fully aware of the dangers of getting back with an ex: it's all too likely the very problems that drove them apart will continue to exist, and it's something she will have to deal with.

hence she says "Sweet Chameleon.. so what if it ends where the sun doesn't shine"...

but right here, right now, all she wants to win her lover back. it's all very complicated. and very autobiographical.

(then again, my life's a series of complications and i like it just fine. Razz )

DeadPoet SG

Yup. The title says it all. Wink

expiringpoet SG

sigh...so sweet yet sad. Its a nice piece pee, good one Cool

dinky1409 SG

haha nice keep it gg!! =)

choco B SG

Enjoyed this poem very much Smile

Bluesky_Liz SG

Being last in line meaning that it will last is quite debatable and thus, I thought suits the overall unsureness that the narrator is expressing in the poem.

I love the play of words. Literal meaning and metaphorical meanings (is that the right phrase?) flipping in turn and making sense either way. Cool