Shadows' Soul

last SG · 2006-02-13T22:59:37+00:00

All the tastes you describe, does seem to make the person this is addressed to seem rather colorful.

MoonIce SG

Yoiz so long
here goes for my Topics Embarassed

Within the Shadows

In the Shadow
I cry
My heart bled
You look at me unflinchingly

In the Shadow
I reflect
I regret
I choose

In the Shadow
I dare
I stepped out
Out of your shadow

In the light
I smile a true one
I only smile for other
In your eye, I smile without caring

In the light
Finally I know where there is light
There will be shadows
But with courage, I face the shadows with a ever true smile

dsnake1 SG

Dark side of the Moon !
interesting piece. Smile
yah, where there is light, there will be shadows.

MoonIce SG

ah yeah recently face the dark side of the moon yeah
aw need to brush up on mine words liao
so long no compose liao
this one i thought out at the moment i type de kekeke
miss thinking
keep a lookout yah

Bluesky_Liz SG

The darker the shadow, the brighter the light.

Good on you that you found the courage to face up and smile. Cool

MoonIce SG

yeah thanks =p
kekeke too bad working now otherwise i ll be thinking n typing away

InnoHippo SG

become a stronger person after self-reflection Wink

MoonIce SG

yup
expect more dark reflections

MoonIce SG

Mirror of Reflections

None
I do not see
Am I
To the world I am blind

One
I do see
Am I
Beneath the shadows

Two
I observe
Am I
Underneath the moon

Three
I know
Am I
Out there in the universe

Four
I understood
Am I
With my dark soul

Five
I believe
Am I
Under the sun

Six
I cheers
Am I
Out there

Bluesky_Liz SG

Interesting play with ambiquity of question/statement. Not all of them sound like they can go either way though. I see you are trying to keep in pattern, but it looks doing that is causing some of the lines to read like they're incomplete.

MoonIce SG

hmmm...

will keep it in mind

Mr. Green
no kind of pattern for this one
kindda like going on n on all in a single thought Confused

dsnake1 SG

wow, came out pretty fast with a reflection.

seems you are trying to write the poem in a fixed pattern. which is not a bad thing. experiment with the form and shape of the work.
i like the gradual "count-up" from darkness to light. Hope is expressed among those words. Smile

dsnake1 SG

agreed too. Smile

MoonIce SG

hehehe Embarassed

so long never think liao

now every flowing sia

Mr. Green

dsnake1 SG

no need to think much.
sometimes the words just flow out
that's called inspiration! Very Happy

MoonIce SG

yeah
:embarassed::embarassed::embarassed:

dsnake1 SG

don't feel embarassed.
the first draft of a poem is the creative part of the work because it comes from your heart and your head. ( i read this somewhere,).
after that it's all labour trimming and polishing it.. Laughing

MoonIce SG

=p
i do trim otherwise i leave it raw
most of my works i trim once n no more.
eh where DP go arh kindda miss him wor =p

Bluesky_Liz SG

DP's on a break from the internet due to real life busyness. He'll be back. Cool

MoonIce SG

hmm... say hiz to him on my behalf if i not around sia

thanks. Mr. Green

MoonIce SG

Tastes For Thoughts

Bittersweet you Taste
Moments of Sorrows pass
How Dark you are
My favourite Chocolate

Salty you Cry
Moments of Laughters pass
How Tiny and Innocent you are
My favourite Popcorn

Sourpuss you Look
Moments of tears pass
How Natural you are
My favourite Plum

Sweetly you smile
Moments of Seduction pass
How Colourful you are
My favourite Candy

All four taste of Life
Delights the Soul
How enticing you are
My favourite food