Thanks for posting this poem ShrodingersCat. It was a delightful
piece to read.
Here are some of my comments, but you dont have to take it
seriously.
You gave me a flower today
plucked from the plant whose name
i can never remember
growing in the terra cotta pot
hanging by the kitchen window
Good opening, but imo the last two lines are unnecessary.
You stood next to me
flower in your hands
silly smile on your face
as you wait for me to notice you
- tousled hair haloed by the
light from the flourescent lamp
that was getting rusty
and we couldn't be bothered anyway
Why next to me? Will it be better if it is in front of me? Do
you think it would be better if you break this strophe into two?
Just a suggestion. By the way, I really like L5 & L6, good
image.
A split second passed by
when I wanted to tell you how much
I love your artless ways
Imo, these three lines are unnecessary. Dropping them will heighten
the impact of the poems last three lines.
You thrust the flower towards me
with your soapy fingers
and I took it gently,
fragile little thing it was,
warm rosy blush on a dying stalk
and kissed it,
This might sound like a silly question but why soapy
fingers?
and knew, despite my thoughtless ways
you know how much I love you
anyway
Nice ending.
Thanks for the read ShrodingersCat. 
