September Poetry Exercise

DeadPoet SG

Hello SingaporeMacross, do you remember this poem? Twisted Evil

That Is Just To Say

I have eaten
The plums
That were in
The icebox

And which
You were probably
Saving
For breakfast

Forgive me
They were delicious
So sweet
And so cold

By William Carlos Williams

Okay guys for this months exercise, see if you come up with different versions of this poem. Have fun! Very Happy

This version is from a friend of mine,

That Is Just To Say

Yeah,
I ate
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
saving
for yourself

They were off
and made me sick
expect to hear
from my lawyers

And this is from me,

That Is Just To Say

You have eaten
the what
that were in
the icebox?

OMG
I was saving
them for
the damn rats!

Forgive me,
they were deadly
sweet yes
but still deadly

DeadPoet SG

Two more before I logout. Twisted Evil

That Is Just To Say

You should not
have eaten
the plums in
the icebox

I was saving
them for
tonights kinky
sex with you

Now that YOU
have eaten them
you can wank
yourself to sleep

That Is Just To Say

Dear Sir
since you have
eaten the plums
in the icebox

It is my duty to
inform you that they
will cost you
S$600,000

Yes, they are plums,
not peanuts
but it is for charity
and I know
you will understand

tare SG

Originally posted by DeadPoet:

That Is Just To Say

You should not
have eaten
the plums in
the icebox

I was saving
them for
tonights kinky
sex with you

Now that YOU
have eaten them
you can wank
yourself to sleep

hmm... written by a guy [YOU] to a .... Twisted Evil

KittynMeow SG

Have you eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox?

Which I
have specially bought
for you
and your lover.

I hope
you sleep well.
This long
and eternal slumber.

my attempt.... not so deadly... just make them sleep forever nia...

Master -_- SG

Those plums
in the icebox
are not
actually plums

They are just
Cow Dungs
coated with cocoa
packed in a box

No wonder
the smell
lingered around
your stupid dogs

Neutral

choco B SG

That Is Just To Say

I have eaten
The plums
That were in
The icebox

It was
An emergency
I just had
To

Forgive me
I was constipated
And there weren't
Any prunes T___T

KittynMeow SG

Originally posted by choco B:
[b]That Is Just To Say

I have eaten
The plums
That were in
The icebox

It was
An emergency
I just had
To

Forgive me
I was constipated
And there weren't
Any prunes T___T[/b]

hahaha this was funny.... haha

ShrodingersCat SG

That Is Just To Say

oh! are you sure?
were those plums
that were in
the icebox?

And which
were incredibly
so juicy
and very sweet?

Forgive me
I hadn't known
they were plums
and yours

but frankly, dear
it wouldn't have
made a
difference
*burp*

coffeeortea SG

wow.. im learning This stuff now in lit.. =D

DeadPoet SG

The narrator is a girl lah. Confused Laughing

DeadPoet SG

Originally posted by ShrodingersCat:

[b]That Is Just To Say

oh! are you sure?
were those plums
that were in
the icebox?

And which
were incredibly
so juicy
and very sweet?

Forgive me
I hadn't known
they were plums
and yours

but frankly, dear
it wouldn't have
made a
difference
*burp*
[/b]

Hahaha. This is cute! Mr. Green

DeadPoet SG

Really? In that case want to give it a try? Mr. Green

dsnake1 SG

My version :

That Is Just to Say

I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the fridge.

You were what,
actually
saving them
for breakfast?

Too bad.
They were sweet,
and so cold,
just like you.

Mr. Green

Bluesky_Liz SG

Hi! Cool Can I play?

Ants have eaten
the plums
that you left
on the kitchen
table

I told you
to keep them
in the
icebox

I was ignored
and now
You
will have
no breakfast.

dsnake1 SG

Nice twist to the original version, Laughing
Hi Bluesky_Liz, welcome .

tare SG

My singlish version....

That Is Just To Say

Yah lah it's me,
Who eaten
the plums
In the fridge.

You no put
Your name
on them
How I know?

They look sweet
but no leh
sour like wat
say my gastric

-_-"

The man who was death SG

I have eaten
The whole icebox
Only plums
Are left.

I guess
I won't need lunch
Saving
For dinner

Plug left inside
electrocuting
My insides
Buzzzzzzz

Mr. Green

DeadPoet SG

This is really funny. Laughing

DeadPoet SG

Welcome to DPS (S) Bluesky_Liz!

Good to have you here with us! Very Happy

Bluesky_Liz SG

Thanks for the welcome guys. Cool

Here's another attempt:

I have eaten
The plums
That were in
The icebox

to make space
for the lychee
and longans
I just bought

Forgive me
but you need
to buy
a bigger
fridge