cutepixie SG here was the very very very short poem: fear is the wall that separates us both The feelings involved are much more than known Unspoken is all that burns us As we indulge in reminiscene And burn we shall In this beautiful nightmare how was it? it's my first try so don't expect me to be great
DeadPoet SG fear is the wall that separates us both The feelings involved are much more than known Unspoken is all that burns us As we indulge in reminiscene And burn we shall In this beautiful nightmare I like short poem because it is easier to read and if skilfully done the effects on the readers can even exceed those of the longer poems. However they are more difficult to analyse. This poem is a good example. Unless it is a typo error, I was wondering why is f in the word fear in small cap? Is it because fear, as perceived by the lovers is not the main thing they are concerned with? Maybe there are other feelings involved which the lovers know but are unspoken? The second thing I is the word burn. It enriches the poem and reflects a darker side of love. Funny thing, it seems that there is a love-hate relationship between the two them. This is support by the phrase beautiful nightmare in the last line. Such sharp contrast! Can you imagine somewhere ask you Did you have a beautiful nightmare yesterday night? Huh??? (There is a term for such phrase but I cant remember right now) In intimate relationship, this is possible.
fudgester SG The phrase 'beautiful nightmare' seems to be an oxymoron to me. The two words contradict each other. I mean, a nightmare is a terrible dream... a terrifying experience with scorpions (or other suitable horrifying imagery) crawling about in your mind. A dream thus has to be ugly before it can be called as a nightmare. Erm.... Maybe the original poet could come forward and care to elaborate?
DeadPoet SG Yes that is the word 'Oxymoron'! Basically it is a figure of speech that juxtaposes two contradictory words. Example, living death, wise fool, etc.
tare SG hahaa... all the mods not very on lah.. give us time ya? nice try wat.... tis forum is for all to have a try on poetry and appreciating it... dun have to be an expert ya? keep trying!!! and pls give us more time to response
cutepixie SG exactly. it's a love hate r/s that describes my poem. as to a beautiful nightmare. for each his own to the meaning but to me it meant that somehow as much as i hate every moment of it, there's a feeling of hope at the end of a rough path that gets me through and keeps me holding on.it's ok if you don't get me though
DeadPoet SG Ideally every poet should help each other by giving mutual supports and feedbacks. It is quite impossible for mods to comment on every poem. But if I can spare the time I will try my best to comment on them. But please dont purposely wait for me, anyone can comment and give feedback. Hope you guys understand. Thanks.
