Take my wings and fly

eskyhastofall SG

hello everyone. my first poem to be posted here. Embarassed

She sings with her toes twirling
As the sun rains down on her
A fair vision in white and gold
She drew those soft brows together
And pulled her wide eyes shut
Her sweet sorrow hung in the air
With every note that floats out of her lips
The words are blurred by the hustle and sound
But I hear them clear as the winter wind
The angel without wings see no pain
Denied with flight, she frolicks in pleasure
Take my wings away and bring me peace
The arc of the rainbow will shield me from light.
The fall of the last verse, she caught with her smile
Drifted, she did, like wispy clouds
Except she flew with the abandon of love
At that moment, I knew of shame
For I had spied an angels hope

fallin SG

Don’t worry, im new here too.

Faye Valentine SG

nice... Mr. Green
Thanks for sharing!

come back with more poems!

DeadPoet SG

Welcome eskyhastofall. Very Happy

Do make yourself comfortable, we are here to share our passion in poetry. Since we are all beginners, dont be shy to post your poems here.

Heehee from the title I thought it is a poem about Red Bull. (Just joking lah)

This is really a beautiful poem. Really creative and playful. I cant help smiling after reading it. Well done. Very Happy

I hope our Christians friends here do not perceive this poem in a negative light. Wink

eskyhastofall SG

Hi DeadPoet~ Thanks for your praise. Yeah, hopefully more people come and share and read the poems here. Hey but Red Bull?!! haha~

Positive critism are welcome!

And I had never thought that this poem might offend Christians. But you do have a point. I apologise if some find this offending.

Let me explain. What I am trying to express is that with the common belief that angels bring happiness and blessings, we tend to neglect that they do have feelings as well. And seeing all the misery they are supposed to release humans from, I supposed they will feel pressure and stress like we do! Ha~ So I thought maybe if they had a choice, they might chose not to be angels. Hmm...of course, that is my point of view. Sorry if some do not agree, but please do not get angry. Smile

Thanks again for pointing this out DeadPoet!! Mr. Green

DeadPoet SG

Sure not a problem. You are most welcome. Very Happy

LazerLordz SG

Exquisite.Nice ballet of words Smile