jOhO SG AD is the only one i can think of. he's not called "the crazy poet" for nothing! who else ... hmm. i'm thinking i could scrap the whole first verse and re-write it.. let it lead into the second and third, rather than forcing the first verse to stay as is, and the second and third trying to link to it.
En' SG unfortunately, you thought wrong... wanna give it a try? joho's list also killed me... I think you shld be able to make some sense out of it... waiting for ur 'entry' (for lack of a better word)
jOhO SG cmon delusion give it a try~~ i'm sure neither of me or en would write a poem (a crap one in my case!!) and then extract words out. we've got nothing to gain that way anyway.. it's just fun and challenging that's why we do it.
En' SG I beg to differ... I'd describe it as insane and challenging... goodness knows how tough a time I had trying to make sense out of the words... *~* isn't my idea of fun... well, not exactly anyway~
En' SG hey! weren't u doing the same to yourself... *~* sides, can exercise creativity mah... why not...? this isn't going to be as fun unless lotsa people play...
jOhO SG no.. i still have my hair on my head and i didn't gasp for air whie i was composing that load of crap!! well hope more pple join in. i guess it does take effort, and when pple come here they wanna "relax" and crap, or chill out, or else they have some heavy load in their heart to pour out to all the aunts and uncles agony here (er that didn't sound rite, linguistically speaking ). anywayZZZZZZ.. i'm gonna zleep.. er i mean sleep! niteZZZ~~~!!
En' SG face it, we just killed our brains, now still in malfunctioning mode (for mine at least...) hey~ you're supposed to be asleep ler...
De|usi0n SG Silver moonlight clothed the naked beach A dolphin like creature roam the shiny sea Full of dismay the creature seem Flaw is the world it had lived in Crumble to the test of the industries Wreck is the word for this hated realm Mirage of the moon could no longer be seen Life is tough but its reality.
En' SG /impressed... you are good... care to try joho's list? (this one I gotta see... coz it sure took me one morn to make it *~* )
En' SG profound spectrum tangible wise elementary swan hide shimmer ^ this one... tsk tsk boy... would have thought you read thru' his replies liao...
jOhO SG hey not bad at all!! i like the silver moonlight check grammar tho. just a no-offence-intended comment
De|usi0n SG The heat shimmer as the sun rosed high The crowd swan in as the fire burns bright Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide The fool looks on, the wise think twice Profound is his thought evgraved in his mind Flame and water, an elementary sight The crowd dismissed as the spectrum subsides In case u donno wat i toking..its a fire at a building in the day. Until the fireman comes to put out the fire
En' SG that's a fast one and I never thought of those words in such a context... hmmm... you wanna try coming up with a word list? tonight? (after I get my zzz )
jOhO SG missed out "tangible" perhaps where u used the word "swan" u meant "swarm"? and should be in the past tense.. okok i have to stop this! too damn critical.. hey good try, and as en said, it's to promote creativity and it has been achieved!
En' SG you know wat... I think you must be the procrastination type... coz u seem to function better under tireness... can catch the small detail... (me in desperate need of zzz... *~* )
