English Composition:
Content: 2/20
Language: 5/20
Comments: (by the teacher):
Dear (Apex's name),
Its good to see that you are making a good effort for your english
essay writing. However, when writing, you need to keep to the topic
or the title given to you, and not spin stories of your own, or
write too out of point.
I have to say that, i gave up reading your 4-page essay after i
read the first 3-lines of your 20 lines 1st-paragraph.
Yes, yes, i do know you want to be special and different from your
classmates. You like to express your words and feelings onto
essays,that is fine, but only if you are writing you very own essay
for yourself in future. Your creativity may be superior, but your
content stops short of it.
And, your language. We arent in Prmary 2 this year, but Secondary
4. Do please read more newspapers, or attend extra language
classes, which if you want, i can conduct for your class.
I do seriously urge you to do a personality, or EQ test. If not, do
please change your ways and habits to make the learning environment
a pleasant one for your fellow classmates and teachers.
Here, i do wish you the best of luck in your O levels, and your
future.
signed.
(teacher from Regent SS)
