June Poetry Exercise

tare SG

nice!!! except err.... simi si "out of life, out of the world"??

and hor.... confirm NOT sg jetty!!! we dun have crystal clear blue sea.... Laughing

dsnake1 SG

Wow, bilingual poet!
my chinese very lousy Embarassed so cannot comment.
I think it's good.

tare SG

hehee... thank u... DP said the chinese one better... i also prefer tis one... Embarassed

maybe tonite post another chinese one.... go inspiration liao! Laughing

dsnake1 SG

my chinese very lousy leh, but please post it, dun bother abt one lousy-chinese reader!! Laughing

fudgester SG

Don't look at me.... I wrote this piece when I was in Sec 4, which was.... six years ago. I can't exactly remember what I meant by 'out of life, out of this world'. I think it has something to do with a man's ambitions and aspirations.

Of course I romanticised the part about the 'crystal clear blue sea'. The seas off SG are green.

If you want to know, I wrote this piece while at Bedok Jetty. Wink

tare SG

hhahahaa.a.. u have a very good imagination!!! either tat u're color blind Laughing

tare SG

another chinese poem Mr. Green

SilverRevo SG

is the song hazard ? i roughly remember the plot in a nebraska town ... haha

Let me see .. can i try ? haha .. i'm just only in sec school ...

Title : Requiescat In Pace , my heart

Since dawn of my conscience , my soul desires.
This entity , immaculate and sweet to bring joy to me.
Her golden threads , glistening bright flowing hair sways.
Her sparkling eyes , ever limpid as though proclaming her innocence.
Her raiment of pure white , ever so tempted to taint.
Her soft caress , exerts but a gentility only she is able of.
She is infallible , scintillatingly equal to true cleverness.
She speaks , with the voice of my love , music to the ears.
I covet her yet she does not belong to me.
Forever and ever , beyond and after , I shall always love you.

oops , done a intangible thing instead ...

I did my rendition of love , it's clean okay!

tare SG

hehee... 1st of all, out of topic wor! Razz

as usual wait for DP to comment on the technical stuff.... here's my view....
err...... too many chim words, a bit trying too hard to impress?? alot of cliche?

keep on keeping on ya?! Mr. Green

dsnake1 SG

Hey tare, can translate the chinese poem to english ? My chinese is really bad. Embarassed

dsnake1 SG

Hi SilverRevo
a requiescat is a prayer for the soul of a dead person. what inspires u to write this poem? Smile

ShrodingersCat SG

Contact Lens

Barely there
you tremble, glistening with the promises of clarity
sitting on the tip of my finger

Almost there
I tremble, my trepidation and terror betrayed as
my finger travels its purposeful journey

Getting No where
as, with a flicker of lashes,
you decide to fall
and I, decisively, fail

SingaporeMacross SG

M-16 Rifle

She lay there standing in the rack,
side by side with the other ladies.
A metal chain put through their trigger-guards,
today would be a day of action.

Fall in! Attention! Shoulder Arms!
Present Arms! Semula! Knock it down!
The weight of a woman rests on my hands,
as the smell of gun oil mingles with sweat.

Parade days here, our time has come,
We don our white gloves immaculate.
Yesterday we wear blue, today we wear white,
To much the crowds delight.

And when the time comes we lift our guns,
See them rise into the air.
The weapons come down nicely in place;
An approving look on Sirs face!

Parade is over and we keep our rifles,
We finally take our rest.
But back at the stockade the armourers exclaim,
My God, what a mess!

DeadPoet SG

So many poems to read!!!

I am so happy!!! Mr. Green

dsnake1 SG

My little piece for the June exercise.

A Father's Day Card
--------------------------

It was just a yellowed card,
the letter cutouts that were pasted,
a bit askew,
the bunny and teddies,
a tad funny,
and on the paper a finger smudge.

No, I won't changed it for any present,
it was a gift from the heart.
"Dear Daddy, I wish you a Happy Father's Day"
it merely said,
lovingly made and written
by an eight year old innocent.

And when she handed it to me,
her eyes bright and smiling,
both little hands outstretched,
her words a torrent of love,
it was a lighthouse shinning
over uncertain seas

This card will keep reminding
the world is never perfect
but is always worth living.
-------------------------------------------------- Smile

KittynMeow SG

Paper Cranes

One for the day when we first met,
Two for days we spend as friends.
Three for days of fun and laughter,
Four for days of chatting till the days end.

Five for weeks of meeting for movies,
Ten for weeks of outings and dining.
Fifteen for weeks of deeper understanding,
Twenty for weeks of knowing each others mind.

Ten for months of wondering if theres more,
Twenty for months of being unsure.
Thirty for months of honeymoon coupledom,
Forty for months of just being together.

Twenty for the hours we spent apart,
Forty for the hours doubt left its mark.
Sixty for the hours tears fell on their own,
Eighty for the hours of knowing it's not meant to be.

And five for the loving memory of the one we love most,
365 paper cranes in a bottle.

I know i know... its full of cliches etc... but that's what exercise is for... practice!! kekeke... anyway, was just trying to be clever with words and numbers... heh....

Camellias4me SG

Hao "shi qing hua yi"... u'r good! Wink

tare SG

harlo dun just read, u supposed to comment one! Mr. Green

tare SG

hhahahaaa...... u urself say liao.... Razz

The man who was death SG

He's now more interested in his blog than being on here

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